To understand better the practical meaning of Logline and comp titles, previously we looked at set 1 and set 2 of the published picture books. In this post, we see another set of pitch examples. I sincerely thank friends who shared their pitches with me.
The list is ordered alphabetically based on the book titles.
When Joanne Simpson was a girl, she fell in love with clouds. All kinds of clouds. Especially the puffy white cumulus. At college, her professors told her, Go home. No one is interested. But Joanne was stubborn. She flew under clouds and above clouds. She even flew straight into the most frightening clouds of all, the enormous cumulonimbi… and changed everything we know about weather today!
She didn’t give any comp title in the query letter.
King Sejong Invents an Alphabet
Carol sent this pitch to Albert Whitman, got a manuscript request, and after 2 R&Rs this amazing book was born.
King Sejong is angered that the use of complicated Chinese characters restricts reading and writing to the educated elite, who want to keep the power of literacy for themselves. Despite great risk, Sejong works secretly for years, creating an accessible alphabet that will bring literacy and equality to all Korea. Themes of social justice and equality through literacy bring contemporary relevance to a 600-year-old story of brains, bravery, and books.
Carol didn’t give a comp title in her query letter.
Lady Pancake and Sir French Toast comically race through the refrigerator to get the last remaining drop of maple syrup. LADY PANCAKE AND SIR FRENCH TOAST (543 words) is a quirky rhyming picture book that takes place in a food-filled fridge. Lady Pancake and Sir French Toast ski through ice cream, start a bean avalanche, and cause culinary chaos in the hopes of being the first to the last drop of syrup. Who will win this wild and wacky race? Can their friendship survive?
On the day of the Tanabata Matsuri (Star Festival), a rebellious girl (Kai) refuses to listen to Mama. But when her selective hearing leads to her elderly grandmother (Oba) getting lost, Kai must put aside her neglectful ways to find Oba. Kai’s Bridge is a heartwarming story that celebrates tradition and a multigenerational family who loves and cares for one another.
(THE STAR FESTIVAL was formerly called KAI’S BRIDGE. And the character’s name was changed to Keiko.) For the comp title paragraph, Moni wrote:
Readers who enjoy festivals and the books Drawn Together (Lé), Ojiichan’s Gift (Uegaki), and My Grandma and Me (Javaherbin) might like this story.
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